[Insert Epicness name of Awesomeness here]

This is ridiculous[/] The boy thought, he was sure he had passed 'that' stump ten zillion times already. Not only that, he had been stuck in the forest for three hours. His pokegear had no signal, and he couldnt call his Dad.

His father had lent him a pokemon to help catch another pokemon for himself. He proceeded into Livorna Forest, just outside Livorna Town of the Amina region, to find himslef a pokemon. He had come accross many great species which he tried to catch, like a Fletchling, the little fire bird pokemon would have been a great starter, yet it flew away before he could throw his pokeball.

Another time was when he saw a Klefki. Boy were those rare. He threw a pokeball at it, only to be verbally abused by the trainer that owned the Klefki. The boy sat on the stump, "Think Calvin, think!" He almost shouted to himself. He was lost in Livorna Forest and was almost out of pokeballs, just with one left. "ARGH!" Calvin shouted kicking the stump, his eyes welled up,"Owwwww,"

"Scatter?"

Calvin scratched his spikey blonde Naruto style hair. Now he was imagining things.

"Scatterbug!?"

If only the Scatterbug was real, Calvin frowned. He was going crazy in this forest. It wasnt until a small thing tackled his leg, which was when he realised the Scatterbug was real. He studied it closely, it was a small, black, insectoid Pokémon with a large head that took up at least half of its body.*It had stubs for feet and no visible hands, there was also a small tooth creeping out of its mouth. And because it looked as if it was rearing for battle, Calvin sent out his rental pokemon from his father.

"Okay Froakie! I choose you!" An amphibious blue frog popped out of the pokeball, it had foam around its neck and had a stance not unlike a ninja. The Scatterbug fired an attack straight away, using string shot. As it fired the strings, Calvin noticed it hadnt harmed Froakie, but the frog pokemon was considerably slower than usual. "If thats how you wanna play, then lets go! Lower its defense by using Leer Froakie!" And in response to the trainer's command, Froakie shot a piercing stare, making the Scatterbug cower in defense, "Now Pound!" With which the Scatterbug quickly jumped out of the way. But because of its low stamina. It was tired, but it picked itself up and charged towards Froakie, biting it on its neck. "Damn, Bug Bite?" It had hurt Froakie a lot also.

"Cmon Froakie! Water Pulse!" And the Frog pokemon clasped its webbed hands together, and charged an attack. Eventually firing a large water bubble from its hands. The bubble held Scatterbug inside. Almost making it faint, but not quite. The Scatterbug used Bug Bite again. And Froakie was on the verge of fainting. It was weaker than Scatterbug. This was his last chance. He had one pokeball. "Put all your remaining energy into Hydro Pump!"

The Froakie fired a cannon of water towards Scatterbug. Calvin threw a pokeball as he called the attack. The pokeball travelled behind the water and less than a second after Scatterbug was hit by Hydro Pump, the pokeball sucked it up, and fell onto the ground.

The ball shook violently, "No. C'mon, please!" Calvin muttered.

Once.

Twice. The ball shook violently again.

Thrice. And the ball was still.

"I DID IT?!" Calvin hugged Froakie before returning home with a new friend in hand. Scatterbug.
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Thanks for reading
I was hoping to catch scatterbug, and i counted 3328 chars iirc.
So i got enough words, but now its up to a grader, ty for reading again

 

Claim!

 

Introduction: Not much of an intro, as you start by showing us Calvin's thoughts right off the bat. You italicized wrong, by the way. The second box needs to look like this: [/I]

So, what you do have isn't bad, as you jump straight into the action without any delay, and get the general vibe of the story across very quickly. That also doesn't leave much to discuss in this section.

Story/Plot: Extremely cliche plot. I'm sorry, but this is possibly one of the most overdone and contrived ideas in the entire section. Kid walks into the forest, finds Pokemon, yay! Since you're new, I'll give you a tip. The story has to be about the Pokémon, but it doesn't necessarily have to be about catching the Pokémon, which is an extremely common new mistake. If I were you, I would first and foremost read other stories, and read through other grades to see what we look for, before attempting another story.

So, as I said, cliche plot. Sadly, it also has a lot of holes. For one, exactly how strong is this Scatterbug? It's apparently stronger then Froakie, but Froakie is a high enough level to learn Hydro Pump. That's level 48. It shouldn't even be a Froakie anymore. It should be a Greninja. These don't appear to be URPG rules you're using, where every Pokémon is automatically at level 100 and as such gets all of their level up moves, because, well, they haven't evolved. If Scatterbug has Bug Bite, it has to be at least level 15, and I guess Froakie has to be a lower level then that, so its actually impossible for Froakie to have Hydro Pump.

Also, if he got this Froakie from his father, why does his father just have an unevolved Froakie sitting around? Froakie can only be obtained as a starter Pokémon, so did his father get his starter Pokémon but then never do his journey?

And where is he exactly? I mean, you say he's in Livorna Forest, in the Amina Region. I missed that on my first read-through and I thought he was someplace in Kalos, due to the abundance of Kalos Pokémon. Literally every Pokémon in this story was introduced in Gen VI. There is no reason for this, because you made up a new region that should probably have Pokémon of all sorts and from all regions in it.

Description: First of all, your story has 'Void Syndrome'. We don't get a single description of Calvin, our main character. He's just a void. In fact, one of the only things you do describe is the Scatterbug. That's good, because you want to put focus on your target Pokémon, but I feel like you could have made this story a lot better and longer just by putting some descriptions in there.

Climax: Since the battle with the Scatterbug is the climax, I'll have to go ahead and say I liked the idea, but not the way it was executed, mostly because a Froakie and a Scatterbug were somehow evenly matched and the Froakie still had access to Hydro Pump. These things make the story unrealistic, because the Pokémon are overpowered, with moves they shouldn't have yet, and because there's no real suspense due to your OP Pokémon. This battle would have been much more intense if both parties were just working with their starting moves, as you do when you first encounter a wild Pokémon.

Length: You're technically good, because the given range is between 3-5K, but this is in the low end of that spectrum. This could have been made way better with little to no effort. Seriously, I feel like you just whipped this out without trying very hard.

Grammar: I might be harsh in this section. Just a warning.

One of the things that stood out to me was the fact that you have some run-on sentences in here. For example, this one.

You can only link so many phrases together with commas before the sentences becomes very awkward. I would split this into two sentences, the first two phrases in one sentence and then the second two in another. I think it would flow much better.

He shouldn't be capitalized, because in cases like this, that is how you tell your reader your sentence is continuing after your character speaks.

You also keep forgetting to put apostrophes in your conjunctions, which are those little things that combine two words into one. For example, your character says c'mon twice. This is technically a conjunction, because it is the words come and on, just smashed together. It's also weird that your character says it twice. I don't know why, it just seems weird.

Verdict: You get the Scatterbug just because I really hate turning people down when they're only writing for Easiest. Still, you'll need to think outside the box and fix those grammar issues if you plan on writing for higher grades.

 

Thankyou @Marius; and i understand you're not bring harsh you're just helping.

I also know where to improve also So thankyou again for that. I also agree with the fact that tjis was on the low end. Only because i didnt want to rush into it too fast and fail miserably. Hence the cliche plot. I also didnt know it didnt have to involve catching the pokemon. Thars news to me .

But anyway. Tyvm