Bloodline #3

Bloodline​

Chapter 3​

“Sir, the main barrier has fallen; our troops are falling back to the inner village.”

Commander Richard looked up the soldier standing in front of him, noting that the young man’s knees were shaking wildly.

“Do you fear death?” Richard asked the young man.

“N-no sir, I do not.” The young man replied shaking with fear.

“Than what do you fear?” Richard asked him.

“Sir, that I will I die and had been no help to our great kingdom, sir!” the young man replied with a strong voice.

Richard eyes were like that of a wolf, piercing through the man. A cold chill ran down his spine. It was as though Richard could into his very soul. “Do your job, and you won’t have to worry about that. Now get to front and fight.” Richard said with a commanding voice.


The young man turned and walked out of the command bunker as fast as he could. Richard, along with his commanders, were trying to find a way to out maneuver the enemy to force them back.

“Captain!” Richard looked to the door. Asa and Shunsui were there.

“I thought I told you to stay in the barracks with Shunsui!” Richared yelled.

“Don’t blame her. It was I who left, she just followed. “ Shunsui said.

“And what are you doing here? I told you to stay as well.”

“No way in hell I am just going to sit on my ass while this is going on, now tell me what needs to be done out there.” Shunsui replied with a demanding voice.

Richard looked at his commanders then back at Shunsui.

“The main barrier has fallen the inner middle and the right and left will collapse soon as well. You and Asa split up and each take one to buy us some time to think of a plan.”

“Right!”

Asa turned and rushed back to the barracks, Shunsui followed her back. Troops all over were mobilizing, most of them were heading to the front lines to reinforce them while other where preparing from the counter attack.

Shunsui and Asa pushed and rushed though the troops, dashing into the barracks. Asa walked over to her trunk, opened it and stripped down. Shunsui turned around as fast as he could.

“We are running out of time. On the side of the bed in front of you is a chest with spare armor. Get it.” Asa said. Shunsui walked over opened the chest and took out the armor along with a sword and shield.

“Which barrier do you want, Shunsui?” Asa asked.

“I am taking the left barrier, you go mid.”

Asa had on light leather armor with short sleeves, shin guards and bracers. She took out a bow and arrows, and put a sword on her right side. She tied her long blond hair up in a bun, then rushed out


Shunsui put on a chain vest and leggings with iron boots. A helmet covered his whole face, it had little breathe holes and one big hole for the eyes. He picked up the iron sword then rushed from the barracks.


Shunsui passed through the groups of troops getting ready to deploy. He rushed out the main gate, and down the streets of Wildwood. All the villagers had been evacuated out of the town already. The streets where covered in garbage from the people rushing to get out of the town. There were broken carts and food everywhere. Fire lit the night sky, the smell of burning flesh filled the air, and each step Shunsui took become heavier then the next as he rushed to the frontlines.


Shunsui made it to the left side of town, spotting the wood barrier. It was twelve feet tall and forty-six feet wide, it was made of logs and behind the logs the men stacked everything they could from the houses to help keep it standing. But the wall would not hold much longer.

The man shouting at everyone seemed to be in charge. He wore armor like Shunsui’s, and he had short black hair, brown eyes. A look of fear covered his pale face. It was as if the man thought he was dead already and Shunsui knew that he had no time to waste. Shunsui raced over to the man, panting slightly from the weigh of his armor.

“Are you in charge here?” Shunsui asked him.

“I’m not sure. Our commander left the barrier and attacked them head on, but that was hours ago and I think he is dead.”

Shunsui looked around and saw that all of the soldiers were beaten and cut up, most of them were all laying down on the ground, waiting for medical attention as there weren’t as many medics as wounded soldiers. Most the town up ahead was on fire, and an army stood behind the barrier. All the soldiers that were still standing were taking tables, chairs, everything they could find and stacking them on top of the barrier to try and keep it up.

Shunsui knew this plan would fail. On top of that the inn with all his things was up ahead which means he would need to fight his way through a army to get to get to them.

“Alright, listen up! I am taking over command here. First off I want every soldier that is not dying and can still walk up off the ground right now!” Shunsui yelled with a strong voice.

Most stood, their weapons grasped in their hands.

“Secondly, this barrier is going to fall. We need to be ready when it does, so we will need all the intact arrows you can find. We will also need lots of shields, and spears if you can get them.”

After hearing his orders the troops started to move and search for the equipment they needed. Shunsui walked over to the front of the barrier and lifted up his arm.

“Kadabra, come forth!” A bright blue light shone from his arm and Kadabra appeared.

Kadabra stood on its two front legs, its upper chest was brown, and the rest of its body was a dark gold color. It had a long mustache and was holding a spoon in its right hand, and had a very thick tail with a brown ring around it, and a red star on its forehead.


“I need you to make a psychic barrier in front of this one to keep in standing until we are ready, understand?” Kadabra nodded at Shunsui and shut its eyes, forming a shimmering purple barrier over the wooden one.

Shunsui got down on one knee, gazing at everything around him. He noticed that all the houses looked very much the same. All had porches with redish colored guardrails, and were two stories. This gave Shunsui an idea.

“Who here has a Pokemon? Come here if you do.” Shunsui called. Two men walked over to him.

“We do sir!”

The two men were wearing scale armor and chain leggings with helmets over their faces. Both men topped six feet and had claymores sheathed on their backs.

“Alright, what Pokemon do you have?” Shunsui asked.

“Sir, I have a Meditite!” The soldier on the right said.

“Sir, I have a Pancham, sir!” The soldier on the left’s words echoed through his helmet. Shunsui thought to himself, wondering if his plan would work.

“Alright, here is what I need from you two. Use your Pokemon and punch holes through the support beams. After that, punch another hole in the building on the other side of it.”

“Sir, if I may ask, won’t that drop the buildings right on top of us?” One soldier frowned deeply.

“It might, but that’s why your Pokemon are going to be careful. If this works out right we might be able to drop both buildings on the enemy. Now what are your names and rank?” Shunsui asked.

The soldier on the right took off his helmet. His face was oval shaped, his chin covered with a thick black beard. His short hair was black and soaked in sweat.

“Sir, I am Sergeant First Class Leroy, sir!”

The soldier on the left, following his comrade, took off his helmet. He had shining blonde hair that was a little long, blue eyes, and a long face.

“Sir, I am Master Sergeant Gunner sir!

“I am Shunsui and I will be the commanding officer until either I am dead or we win. Now let’s kick some ass.” Shunsui smiled and nodded at both Gunner and Leroy who inclined their heads and marched off to carry out their orders.

The troops start to dump weapons and armor in a pile. The stuff ranged from anything and everything they could find. While they were doing that, Shunsui climbed up barrier and peaked over. They were out of time. The enemy was getting ready to launch their attack. Shunsui jumped down from the barrier and called to all the troops.

“The enemy is going to break through in a few short minutes, everyone pick up a shield and make a shield wall. I want the strongest in the front with the shields, the weakest I want in the back firing arrows at the backline, and the spears at the ready. Gunner Leroy, get over here!”

All the troops picked up shields and stood together, holding their shields together to form a wall. Gunner and Leroy both came out of the house and rushed to Shunsui.

“What is it, Commander?” Gunner asked.

“We are about to have a hard engage, the enemy have a Pokemon with them. We are going to need both of your Pokemon to take it down. If they don’t we all die here.” Shunsui said with worry in his voice.

“We got this, sir. No one is taking this area from us! We will stand our ground!” Gunner shouted.


Boom, Boom, Boom!


It sounded like thunder, within just a few seconds the barrier had been destroyed. It was as if time slowed down, Shunsui turned around. In front of him and the troops stood a Pokemon. it was more then six feet tall, it had spikes running down its back it had a blue spot on its belly and the rest of its body was green, it had black marks on its upper chest on both its back legs, its tall was long and thick it teeth sharper then a blade and its eyes had the look of death it self.

“ROAR!”

The big Pokemon let out a fierce roar and sand started to pour from the marking on its body. Before anyone could move, a sandstorm picked up.

“Tyranitar attack!” A voice called.

The large Pokemon lifted up its left foot and focused its earth power into it, then stomped down as hard as it could. The ground started to split and shake wildly, the earth started rising and shifting.

Shunsui and everyone could hear the enemy but thanks to the sandstorm, they could not see anything more than five feet in front of them.

“Pancham, Meditite, you need take out that Pokemon,” Gunner called out. Pancham was gray with a white head and dark eyes. The little bear Pokemon looked ready for battle. Meditite on the other hand was blue with a white head and feet and was levitating off the ground.

Both Pokemon jumped into the fight.

“Pancham, use Arm thrust!” Leroy called.

“Meditite, use Hi jump kick!” Gunner shouted. The two took off to Tyranitar, Meditite moving around to its back and Pancham from its front. The two fighting Pokemon tried to hit at once. Tyranitar twirled and used its tail like a club to bash Pancham as it tried to strike. It went soaring through the air and crashed through the front of a house.

Meditite, at full speed, kicked Tyranitar in the dead center of its back and fell forward landing on its face. Before Tyranitar had a chance to recover, Gunner gave another command.

“Use Mega Kick, Meditite!” Hearing its order, Meditite landed on the ground, then leaped into the air, its foot glowing silver. It came back down at high speed and kicked Tyranitar in the back of its head.

The kick was so powerful it planted Tyranitar’s face into the ground. Meditite landed right next to Tyranitar, thinking it was down. It became clear that assumption was wrong. As Meditite started to move away, Tyranitar unplanted its face and swiped at Meditite with its long sharp claws.

“Pancham!”

Pancham flew out of the building it was in and landed on Tyranitar’s head, then used its Arm Thrust attack and pounded its head like a drum set. Tyranitar used its tail like a whip and smacked Pancham off its head knocking the little Pokemon to the ground, hard. Meditite was bleeding; Pancham was being beat down like a rag doll. They were almost done for.

Tyranitar walked over to Pancham while it was still on the ground. The monstrous Pokemon lifted up its left foot over the little Pokemon and stomped down as hard as it could. The little Pokemon rolled out of the way just in time.

“Kadabra!”

Tyranitar turned around to Kadabra, only to see a massive bolder. The big rock smashed into Tyranitar’s face, knocking it to the ground. Pancham and Meditite took full advantage of that. At once, the two jumped into the air and readied their mega punch and mega kick attacks. Both the pokemon came down at full speed. Pancham hit Tyranitar in its chest and Meditite hit it in its face, and that was the end of that.

Tyranitar was dead and the barrier destroyed, one whole half of the street had been split in two and four buildings were leveled. Broken furniture lay everywhere in shards of splintered wood.


The ground was shaking like a earthquake, Shunsui had no idea what was in front of him and the troops thanks to that sandstorm since they were forced to almost shut their eyes. Shunsui and the others used the shaking of the ground to tell how close the enemy was. Within just a second time snapped and went from being slow to fast.

The enemy force collided with Shunsui’s shield wall.

“Hold!” Shunsui yelled as they were forced back by the overwhelming force.

Shunsui then used his spear and started to stab the enemy soldier through the small gaps in the shield wall, as did the rest of the troops. They stabbed and pushed back. Those that were not strong enough for the shield stood in the back with bows and arrows, firing at the enemy from a distance. Meditite was using its Psychic power to help Kadabra throw large pieces earth at the enemy lines while Pancham was on top of a roof, throwing rocks at the enemy, but even with all of this, the enemy force was still to great.

The sand faded away and the battle field was cleared of the remaining sand by fierce winds. Blood soaked the ground, mixing with the dirt and creating a slippery mud. The soldiers were having a hard time keeping their balance on the blood-mud, and the shield wall was failing. Shunsui wracked his mind, trying to come up with an idea to win the battle. They had to fight full on.

“CHARGE!” Shunsui yelled.

Those who were holding the shields gave one last tremendous push and dropped the shields, pulling out their swords. What had been the shield wall was now the kill zone as soldiers from each side clashed. The sounds of dying screams filled the air as the two armies hacked and slashed at each other, brutally killing one another. A red mist of the airborne blood floated through the air, carried by the winds. It was impossible to advance forward without stepping on a dying soldier. Blood gushed and freely flowed from wounds inflicted by sword and spear.

The battle raged on and Shunsui’s men were starting to fall fast.

“Roar!” Shunsui looked into the sky. A shadow fell over the field and a big red dragon swooped down, setting fire to all the buildings. Pancham dove off one of the flaming roofs, hitting the ground hard. This was the end of the battle, Shunsui realized. He gave the order for the forces to draw back.

“Everyone, fall back to the fort! Retreat!”

All the men turned, hightailing it out of there, not even looking back they all ran for the fort. The enemy gave chase, shouting victory. All the wounded tried to run but could not make it. They were slaughtered in the streets, their deaths slowing the enemy advance.

“Kadabra, use your Psychic to knock down the buildings!”

Kadabra lifted up its arms and, focusing really hard, lifted two large pieces of earth out of the ground and then hurled them at the house that Pancham and Meditite had been in. The two rocks slammed into the last support beam and the house collapsed sideways onto the battlefield killing some of the enemy soldiers.


Thanks to Kadabra, Shunsui’s small force was able to get ahead and they made it to the fort. The gates had been flung wide open and the men dashed through. The gates were shut and bolted. Shunsui noticed that no one was in sight.

“What happened? Where is everyone?” Shunsui asked.

The rest of the men looked around but no one was there. The fort was empty.

“Search the command bunker! I last saw Richard with the other commanders in there.” The men broke up and started to look around at Shunsui’s orders.

“I have something!” A soldier yelled. He ran over to Shunsui with a map clutched tightly in his hand.

“Was this the map Richard was using to plan our next move by chance?” The soldier asked.

“Yes, it was why?” Shunsui replied.

“That fucking asshole left us, that’s why!” The soldier shouted, forgetting himself for a moment. The rest of the men looked frightened. Some were even crying.

“What do you mean, they left us?” Shunsui asked.

“It’s just how it sounds! This map is of all the highways that lead to Wildwood and the route that is on this map leads to the next city. They never planned on helping us defend the city! We were a sacrifice so they could save their own asses!”

The sudden pounding on the gate told Shunsui that the enemy had caught up.

“What do we do now?” All the soldier were now panicking.

“Everyone retreat, we will used the back gate just as Richard did and escape into the forest. Let’s move out!” Just like that everyone rushed for the back gate.

“ROAR!”

Before they could get to the back gate, the big red Dragon Pokemon appeared once again. It landed in front of a soldier. He fell to the ground and screamed in fear as the big red Pokemon picked him up with its right hand, and bit off his head. Blood sprayed out of the open neck are the men stood there, petrified.

“Boom!”

The front gate was breached and enemy troops poured into the fort. The men could do nothing but scream in fear as they were slaughtered like animals. Shunsui looked at the big red Pokemon. He knew the only was out was to kill it, so he lifted up his sword ran for it while its back was turned.

“Pancham, Meditite, GO!” Shunsui turned as he was running. The red Pokemon turned as well as it heard Gunner give a command. It opened up its mouth and fired a huge fireball at them. It landed and Gunners and Leroy’s feet and exploded, blowing them into pieces.

Pancham was wounded on the ground. The red dragon walked over picked it up, the little Pokemon screeched and tried to break free but could not. The dragon bit into it side and ripped it into pieces. Then the Dragon turned to see Shunsui. This beast had two long horns on its head, it whole body was red, its eyes were filled with rage and death, and its teeth dripped blood. Its claw were as sharp as swords and it had a long tail.

Shunsui stared it down for a brief moment, then dashed to it. The Pokemon opened up its mouth and used a flamethrower attack. Shunsui moved out the way of it, but when he got close the Pokemon, it spun around really fast and tried to hit Shunsui with its tail. Shunsui slid on his knees and slashed the side of its left leg.

Shunsui got up, slashing the back part of the leg and the dragon Pokemon fell on its knee. Shunsui jumped on its back and stabbed it in the left shoulder below the wing. The Pokemon threw Shusnui off its back and roared in pain, Shunsui hit the ground and the Pokemon raced towards him. It used a fire blast move and Shunsui ducked under the attack. It missed but Shunsui was not fast enough to totally avoid the big red Dragon. It grabbed him and started to crush his side.

Shunsui stabbed the Pokemon’s hand but it didn’t let go. Shunsui’s arm started to glow.

“Kadabra! Whirlipede!” Both of Shunsui’s Pokemon appeared. Kadabra aimed it’s spoon at the Dragon and fired its Psychic attack at it. The wave of telekinetic energy smashed into the Pokemon’s head and it dropped Shunsui.

Whirlipede then fired off its String shot attack and started to cover the Dragon Pokemon. It tried to get up but Kadabra used its Psychic Powers to hold it down. Shunsui got up and walked over to the Pokemon. It was helpless now, and Shunsui lifted up his sword right over its face. He looked into its eyes then…

“Boom!”

Shunsui turned, and saw Kadabra make a barrier, and blocked whatever was about to hit him.

“That’s enough from you!” Called an unknown voice.

Shunsui looked up there to see a young woman. She was no older than him, and wore leather armor on her chest. Most of her neck was showing, and she had on a leather skirt, boots with shin guards, and bracers on her forearms. The woman had long purple hair, brown eyes, and an oval face. She stood around five foot ten and was very slim.

“What is your name and who are you?” She asked.

“I could ask you the same thing.” Shunsui replied, sword still raised.

“You could, just as I could kill you right now, so I will ask again and this time give me an answer. Who are you?”

“Look at you barking orders like you own this place, the nerve. I am not telling you shit so do me a favor and fuck off.”

The girl looked at Shunsui with a nasty look.

“Fine, I tried to be nice but I guess you really want to die.” The woman shrugged nonchalantly before speaking again. “Gengar, use Shadow ball!”

A purple Pokemon appeared out of thin air, an evil grin on its face, its eyes glowing and red. It put both hands together and black ball of dark energy formed in its palms. Little threads of electricity raced through the dark ball, crackling loudly. The Pokemon reached forward and the Dark energy ball flew towards Shunsui, Kadabra put up another Psychic barrier, and shielded Shunsui.

“Wow, there it is! I’m dead, but I do have to say that is an amazing display of skill, so bravo!” Shunsui clapped his hands and laughed at the girl, stalling for more time to search for an escape.

“You dare mock me? Maybe it has escaped your attention, but I have you surrounded!”

Kadabra stepped in front on Shunsui, and its whole body started to glow bright silver and change, the mark on Shunsui’s arm glowing so brightly, the light started to burn his skin. Shunsui fell to his knees, crying out in pain.

The pain faded as did the light, but Kadabra was different now.

“Alakazam!” The Pokemon called out.

Kadabra evolved into its final stage, Alakazam. His upper body was brown and he had brown patches on his knees and elbows, the rest of his body was a gold yellow color, he had a long mustache and a spoon in each hand, the bones in is head grew out.


“So your Pokemon evolved,” the woman chuckled. “Nice, but that won’t save you.”

{Get ready to capture her}

Alakazam enter my mind using his psychic power to communicate with me. He lifted up both spoons pulled them to his chest and the girl talking to Shunsui was pulled across court yard and landed at Shunsui’s feet, all her men, all the enemy soldiers jumping to their feet. Shunsui held his sword to her neck, pressing hard enough to draw a thin trickle of blood.

“Well, well, well. What am I going to do with you?” Shunsui said with a big grin on his face.

“You cheating scumbag!” The woman seethed, the few droplets of blood rolling down her neck.

“Cheating! Bwahaha, maybe YOU are blind but this is war, sweetheart. There is no such thing as cheating, only winners and losers like you.” Shunsui replied while throwing his head back in laughter.

“Alright, kill me so my men can finish you off.”

“You really think they can kill me? You are dumber then you look.” Shunsui said with a smile.

“Just who the hell are you!” she yelled.

Shunsui smiled at her. “I am Shunsui. Now, who are you?”

The girl gasped, and looked shocked. It was like she knew Shunsui.

“You… you are Shun… Shunsui, my apologies, sir. I didn’t know it was you. Please forgive me!” The girl lowered her head, Shunsui didn’t know if he should kill her or let her talk.

“Who are you and how do you know me?” Shunsui asked, his voice dark.

“I am Teresa. Your brother Jushiro, sir, sent me to take Wildwood. We were told you would be gone by now. But I don’t understand why do you fight with the enemy?” Teresa said with fear in her voice.


“Good question, I needed info and was using them to get it until you morons came to town. Had I know Jushiro sent you I would have never defended this damn place, not that it matters. The guy I needed left so now I am back to square one, thanks. Stand up already.”

Teresa got up off the ground and brushed herself off, then called back her pokemon. Shunsui put the sword back to her neck.

“Before I even think about trusting you, prove to me that Jushiro sent you.” Shunsui said.

“But, I don’t have anything.” she replied.

“If he really did send you, surely you must some sort of orders with you, yes?” Shunsui questioned, his blade just under her chin.

“I do not, but our commander does. I am just an officer, please believe me. We are on the same side.”

{Funny how fast her attitude changed with that sword to her neck, don’t trust a word she says until she can prove it.}

Shunsui looked at Alakazam. He had a point. Without any proof, he couldn’t trust her, and her soldiers were ready to attack at any time.

{I have a plan.}

“Please, do share.” Shunsui said to his Pokemon.

{Call back Whirlipede so I can teleport us to the inn to get your stuff, then out of town and into the forest.}

“Whirlipede come back.” Shunsui said. The bug Pokemon returned to him.

“Well, since you have no way to prove to me that he really sent you, I can’t chance it. C’ya nerd.”

Shunsui reached out and grabbed Alakazam’s arm. Alakazam then used its Power and teleported to the inn. The building was on fire and the floor was weak. He grabbed all of his things and threw them on the bed then wrapped them in the blanket and teleported out to the forest, his hand grasped firmly on Alakazam’s arm.

The sun was starting to rise; a new day was dawning. What was waiting around the corner, Shunsui thought to himself as he watched Wildwood burn to the ground. Shunsui dropped his things on the ground and called Whirlipede back out. The purple Pokemon had red circles and two antennae in front and spikes all over its sides appeared. Bright yellow eyes shone one either sides of the Pokemons’s head.

“I need you to fix me up buddy.” Shunsui said to his Pokemon.

Whirlipede wasted no time using its string shot to cover up Shunsui’s wounds. Lucky for Shunsui, he had no life threatening injuries, just a few deep cuts. After tending to his wounds, Shusnui took his thing out and stripped down. He put on a white shirt then scale mail over it, light leather pants and put scale leggings over them, and steel boots, he put his katana on his left side. He poured some water over his head and washed some of the blood out of his white hair.



{Who do you think those people were?}


“I’m not sure about that girl. I don’t think she was lying, but she also said Junshiro was my brother, which makes no sense. We are related, but not brothers.”

{Don’t worry about it too much, just ask Jushiro about it next time we make contact with him. Until then we should focus on the here and now.}

“Yeah, you are right. Say, why can I hear your thoughts, I was never able to before?”

{Before I was not strong enough, but after I evolved I gained the power needed to do so.}

“I get it, well, thanks for all your help, buddy.”


Today was a new day, Shunsui thought, his green eyes gleaming with energy and excitement. He looked at both his Pokemon and nodded at them and the three took off moving west. Shunsui didn’t know what was in store for him today, but one thing was for sure, with his Pokemon at his side anything was possible.


To Be Continued…

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Claiming! <3 thanks for your patience!

 

Introduction:

Ahh, you wrote a fun portrayal of Richard to begin the story. You were trying to capture our attention with a heartless, cruel commander, and you took a strong shot at it! My only recommendation would be to make it more cinematic. Include the man's reaction to Richard's biting words (the chill was good), poses, stances, perhaps how Richard looks as he towers over the other man, arms crossed. The exchange shows a lot about both characters, but adding in this type of body language also strongly accentuates the nature of characters and the gravity of this battle.

On this note of portraying characters, I wondered where the description was. We were a good chunk in before we got our first bit of description about Asa, and I think it would have immersed readers into the story quicker if we had a look/scent/sound to bodies both belonging to characters and dead bodies.

Description:

OOOOH lovely, we get more description as this moves along! I was pleased with the descriptions of the Pokemon and the people, and thought you hit the mark with a beautiful arrow! Now I just recommend making everything three-dimensional, including body statures, little distinct features, and more that separates fictional characters on a page to real-life people. Go beyond hair color, eye color, and the sound of their voice, and we have a stronger grasp of your world. For example, you included all these different dimensions here and more:

WOOOO loved it! Including more of those features like body shape, how things seem, and more to your characters and the environment is important for future writing. The writing is getting stronger!

Besides that, I would suggest working on coloring your details brighter. Explaining through example:

Both Pokemon are using different attacks, and at different sizes too, I want to see how differently these moves look and affect Tyranitar. It's worth your time to work on selecting stronger verbs. Narrow in on the description until you say exactly what you saw in your imagination as it happened. Strong description is important because it links directly to what you can persuade us as the readers; and to be honest, I really wasn't sold that Tyranitar, a gigantic sandstorm-brewin' mythical mon would die if a rock hit it and then two little Pokemon attacked it. I feel like it would have just gotten up and eaten the two little Pokemon on spot lol... If you really want to make these scenes more believable, prove that it happened with your description. Talk about the flailing, helpless hands of the mon as it collided against the rock, its roar of agony, etc. Sensory details like that are key to realism.

Story:

Hmmm... I was very confused the whole time. I understand your note saying that this is a continuation, but even then I think it is in your best benefit (and not just the reader's) to recap a little here and there of what's been happening. By recapping, you remind yourself of what's happening as you write; the momentum keeps on carrying strongly, and the plot just seems a lot more cohesive. Good times to do that are in the introduction, such as when Richard is staring down the young man. It even works in sparse bits dispersed through the story, weighing down the reader with the nature of war. Avoid too much recap as that would be filler, but use just enough to keep the characters / plot fresh in a continuation.

I also think it'd help you to focus on the transition between scenes. Examples:

Out maneuver what enemy? What exactly is happening at this point in the war? And what is the plan (how does he know it will fail), and why does he need to go back to the inn? Is there something really important there that he's missing, or is that part of his plan? The sentences you have written above are topic sentences, which basically make a bold statement and open up the paragraph that usually follows for further explanation. I'm not saying you needed a full paragraph of info after your sentences, but just adding in a sentence or two more here would really help clarify what's happening (would also be an example of a good time to add in some of that recap info).

I'm still a little confused at the end, like why the purple-haired girl randomly appears and why she seemingly just wants to fight him. That being said, there are some really good pieces of a plot here, and I love that you included twists-and-turns! Richard leaving them all was unexpected and it's good to throw us off our feet like that. The actual gore was fun, of course! XD With a little more clarifying information and a plot that flows more soundly, you really have the potential for a great chapter to Bloodline.

Grammar:

Typically, in quotations grammar rules don't pertain as much, but I thought it would be a good time to go over a slight issue with run-on sentences.

That first sentence is similar to the first sentence, and you used the semicolon properly there. "The main barrier has fallen" is a complete sentence in itself, so you can't combine it with the following words without a semicolon, or comma and conjunction (period and a new sentence are simple and often the best solution).

"Troops all over were mobilizing" is also a complete sentence, as is "sounded like thunder." If you ever get stuck deciding whether you need to break a sentence apart, read it out-loud to yourself and your natural breath stops will tell you when you need to break it up.

A minor issue popped up here and there: the difference between were and where. Where pertains to a location, whereas were is a state of being. Same as with too and to; you used "to," as in "the enemy force is to great," and too is used for emphasis (so it should have been too here). To is a preposition, so you would use to as in "to the sword" or for an infinitive before a verb, ie, "to go to war."

Both quotations are actually full sentences, with "said" and "replied" suggesting that the action of speech is linked with the actual speech. In this case, we want everything following the quotation to be lowercase and a comma connecting them (where a period would be - if not, just a comma).

On a small note, if you choose to capitalize the first word of a Pokemon attack, you should capitalize all other words that are part of that attack as well.

With "ROAR!" or "BOOM!" don't use quotations as part of the onomatopoeia. If you can, avoid using onomatopoeia at all as this lowers the quality of writing (unless you were doing it in a situation that fit, such as a superhero story). Instead, use more powerful description to say, "A loud roar thundered across the battlefield" or "a loud explosion suddenly knocked the soldiers off their feet." Use your words. They're good for the story!

If this is a stylistic thing, that's fine, but this also needs to be connected to the following action of speech with a comma. The only thing that differs is that you're using parenthesis instead of quotation marks. {Get ready to capture her,} Alakazam said.

What really confused me right there was that the story suddenly shifted into first person. Who is me if Shunsei is somebody else? As this only happened once, I'm assuming this was a mistake. On that note, please make sure you proofread everything, as there were a handful of other errors. These errors really accumulate over time and lower the story quality. Nothing is perfect, but refining the writing by proofreading really polishes it.

Outcome:

You gave a great attempt in this story. There are pieces of a plot hanging here and there and decent details that make this a fun story. The jarred effect of reading it comes from you moving too quickly, being too excited to slow down and really explain what's happening, and that happens to all of us. I'm going to have to say Pancham is Captured, but Meditite is not. You definitely deserved one of them, and you should be proud! Just work on patching the plot together a little better, adding in those important details, improving sensory details in the battle, and try to fix up a few of the grammar issues too.